Tuesday, 14 October 2014

Feedback NDM Test 1

WWW:
The second half of the essay just starts to address the question with some interesting points.

EBI:
The first half is very weak and doesn't lay out a convincing argument at all. not nearly enough focus on the institution.
Written English is poor your opening paragraph is not the way to start an essay.
Need much more focus on the question

LR:
Write a new intro paragraph clearly laying out both sides of the argument.


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